Listening to books on disc in your car that have not been revised for word space = you flailing your arms and shouting obscenities while pedestrians stare in bewilderment
Imagine, if you will, that all words have a unique charge. They push away from each other, so you can’t have too many of them in the same page or even in the same chapter. The exceptions to this rule include articles, pronouns, and other frequently used words that are basic to the reader’s comprehension. Almost every other word, like voice for instance, needs to be handled with care.
“Are you going to kiss me now?” Ronald asked in a husky voice.
Burger’s voice dropped in pitch. “Oh yes.”
“Then why,” Ronald started, his voice catching, “don’t you take off that box and come over here?” *end scene*
Granted, the book playing in my car had a good enough plot to get me through dialogue like this (something much more riveting than burger love), but every time a word got repeated, I felt like digging my fingernails into the dashboard.
People please REVISE FOR WORD SPACE! Otherwise, I swear, I’ll go flying off a cliff.
Michelle Joyce Bond